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Globalization


Although the globalization - political, economic and cultural - process has been praised by many individuals, particularly by those who have benefited from it, more and more people have questioned (1) its outcomes, hence consequences in their own lives. If the political and economic sides of globalization have generated more discussion and (2) is more likely to (3) engage people to demonstrate against its negative effects, the cultural side is no less controversial.

The rapid advance of transport and telecommunication technologies have enabled people everywhere to have access to a large diversity of cultural products. The continuous development of new technologies and improvement of existing ones - Internet, television, electronic gadgets and so on - have considerably enlarged the number of channels through which culture - TV series, music, books and cinema - can be disseminated to everyone in every corner of the globe. However, since cultural dissemination depends on sophisticated technological means (normally developed and manufactured by developed countries), the culture to be (4) spread out is also likely to be (5) the one produced in these developed countries. Needless to say that the cultural products from these countries are based on the dominant values of (6) these cultures.

The manner (7) people and countries around the world receive these cultural products varies. One group of countries - principally those sharing the same values with the one that disseminates its cultural products - (8) may accept, rather passively than critically, these products. The (9) large (10) acceptation and receptivity of American music, cinema, TV series and so on by so many countries (11) demonstrate how their people are open (12), and actually demand, these cultural products.

On the other hand, there are (13) those peoples or countries that have a more specific culture, which is based on distinct - political, cultural and religious - values and beliefs. (14) Part of these peoples may accept, and wish to have access to, these cultural products - sometimes (15) in spite of laws forbidding them - whereas other individuals may simply consume them, but adopt a more critical view (16) regarding them and the ideology inherent (17) into them. There are, however, those who fiercely reject any cultural product originating (18) from the West, alleging that they are against fundamental principles and values of their societies. They will thus fight against consumption of these products by their compatriots and battle against nations producing and (19) disseminating them.

Therefore, (20) to acknowledge that the world is not a place of a single culture, but a mosaic of distinct and rich cultures is the first step towards preventing those, as Bergman suggests, from continuing to seek the downfall of the West. Viable alternatives would perhaps include the establishment of channels for the dissemination of other cultures as well. Creating educational plans that encourage diversity and plurality of cultures would be most important.

Footnotes

(1) Suggestion only: Change "its outcomes, hence consequences in their own lives" to "its consequences and thus the effect on their own lives..
(2) Correction: Use "are" instead of "is."
(3) Suggestion only: Consider using "motivate" or "incite" in place of "engage."
(4) Suggestion only: Use "disseminated" instead of "spread out."
(5) Suggestion only: Consider replacing "the one produced in these developed countries" with "that of these developed countries" or "that originating in these developed countries."
(6) Suggestion only: Use "their" instead of "these."
(7) Correction: Insert "in which" or "by which" before "people."
(8) Suggestion only: Consider changing "may accept, rather passively than critically, these products" to "may accept, more passively than critically, these products" or " may accept, rather more passively than critically, these products."
(9) Suggestion only: Use "great" instead of "large."
(10) Correction: Use "acceptance," rather than "acceptation."
(11) Correction: Use "demonstrates" rather than "demonstrate."
(12) Correction: Insert "to" between "open" and "and."
(13) Suggestion only: You can delete "those." It adds nothing.
(14) Suggestion only: Use "some" instead of "part."
(15) Suggestion only: Consider changing "in spite of laws forbidding them" to "despite laws prohibiting their use."
(16) Suggestion only: You don't have to use "regarding" or "pertaining to" when you can use "toward or towards."
(17) Suggestion only: "into" is incorrect. It is, in effect, "to the inside of." (I walked into the house. I put the gift back into the box..) "in" is the correct word to use in this instance..
(18) Correction: You normally "originate in" rather than "from."
(19) Correction: Use "distributing," rather than "disseminating" for physical products:
(20) Suggestion only: Use "acknowledging," the "present participle" of the verb, acknowledge, as subject of the sentence, rather than the infinitive. The phrase will sounds less stilted.



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